Do you like this story I wrote?

its kind of okay.......a lot f editing required....a description f d surrounding or ppl all in chaos...troubled n perplexed...shouting....cudav added a bit f d reality element....coz it doesnt really sound like a tsunami......too random..thnx dt ur mom told....i wud say read a lot 2 observe how gud authors decribe movements f ppl.....n hw is a catastrophe described........ur enthu is worth appreciating although.......n yeah u shudnt b taking time 2 recognize ur mom's voice.....last sentence i did not like much....i stared back n all.....bt keep trying.......